and I could use reviews from other readers. I only have one reviewer and that kinda retards others from really reading.
I just checked it , and it seems totally different than before.
The plot is basically the same, but I revamped a bunch of stuff and I think the writing is much better. I also added alot of extra paragraphs/sentences to most chapters. Probably took out a bit as well. I merged the first two chapters into one chapter and that works better too:)