I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
Kiwi wrote: Thats the thing... 75 million profit doesn't seem to reach their lofty heights!!!
Anyway. not much in the mood for it atm, its been nonstop the last couple of weeks and its breaking my heart... i like to get away and pretend its not happening sometimes!!
i understand... reading gary's posts on myspace shows me how much feeling goes into this! how's plans for the trip coming??
Kiwi wrote: Thats the thing... 75 million profit doesn't seem to reach their lofty heights!!!
Anyway. not much in the mood for it atm, its been nonstop the last couple of weeks and its breaking my heart... i like to get away and pretend its not happening sometimes!!
i understand... reading gary's posts on myspace shows me how much feeling goes into this! how's plans for the trip coming??
Plans are complete, have been since well before christmas!!
Just a matter of counting down the days now... its 2 months todayish!!!
Kiwi wrote: Thats the thing... 75 million profit doesn't seem to reach their lofty heights!!!
Anyway. not much in the mood for it atm, its been nonstop the last couple of weeks and its breaking my heart... i like to get away and pretend its not happening sometimes!!
i understand... reading gary's posts on myspace shows me how much feeling goes into this! how's plans for the trip coming??
At the moment its like seeing the love of your life suffering at the hands of a publicly bad and abuse filled relationship!! With us not being able to help at all!!
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
Kiwi wrote:Plans are complete, have been since well before christmas!!
Just a matter of counting down the days now... its 2 months todayish!!!
anything going on between now and the trip?
Um... well i'm still working on what i'm doing!! I might have to get something pretty temp to keep me going for a while until i find what i want, but i'm def very actively searching for something to take me forward.... preferable in Brisbane or the coast, something with a future... time will tell i guess!!
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
Um... well i'm still working on what i'm doing!! I might have to get something pretty temp to keep me going for a while until i find what i want, but i'm def very actively searching for something to take me forward.... preferable in Brisbane or the coast, something with a future... time will tell i guess!!
whatever you do you will do it well!!! and you will be successful... maybe rich enough to buy yourself a football lub someday!!
Um... well i'm still working on what i'm doing!! I might have to get something pretty temp to keep me going for a while until i find what i want, but i'm def very actively searching for something to take me forward.... preferable in Brisbane or the coast, something with a future... time will tell i guess!!
whatever you do you will do it well!!! and you will be successful... maybe rich enough to buy yourself a football lub someday!!
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
Um... well i'm still working on what i'm doing!! I might have to get something pretty temp to keep me going for a while until i find what i want, but i'm def very actively searching for something to take me forward.... preferable in Brisbane or the coast, something with a future... time will tell i guess!!
whatever you do you will do it well!!! and you will be successful... maybe rich enough to buy yourself a football lub someday!!
I cried, "Oh, Lady Midnight, I fear that you grow old, the stars eat your body and the wind makes you cold." "If we cry now," she said, "it will just be ignored."
Which version do you guys like better? Which one seems more laced with metaphor and image as opposed to "telling"?
i like the first one better
What's better about the first over the second? (Which is actually the reverse order of the versions. I wrote the second one first then added the last few stanzas about forgiveness at a later date.)
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I feel like I just found out that my favorite love song was written about a sandwich.
Both poems are interesting paints. The confusion is that you mix modern day terms with archaic language and it break the flow and feel of the poetry. My suggestion is to choose either the archaic or modern, but don't mix the two.
I went to bed at 8pm last night feeling kinf of tired and slept till noon today. I had the sore throat when I woke up. IT's worse now and I have that feverish/achy kind of feeling.