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LionQueen wrote:

Both poems are interesting paints. The confusion is that you mix modern day terms with archaic language and it break the flow and feel of the poetry. My suggestion is to choose either the archaic or modern, but don't mix the two. 



In which version?



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worry.gifi really hope you get feeling better soon Lion! aww.gif


Thanks. I'm about to go to bed. I just have been hesitant because I wanted to settle in my mind what I was doing tomorrow.hmm I don't really wanna miss work. I do have sick days but still.

 



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hrslvr_paints wrote:

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hrslvr_paints wrote:

Which version do you guys like better? Which one seems more laced with metaphor and image as opposed to "telling"?



i like the first one better



What's better about the first over the second?  (Which is actually the reverse order of the versions.  I wrote the second one first then added the last few stanzas about forgiveness at a later date.)


i don't really know, it just connects to me more

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KateisLost wrote:

worry.gifi really hope you get feeling better soon Lion! aww.gif


Thanks. I'm about to go to bed. I just have been hesitant because I wanted to settle in my mind what I was doing tomorrow.hmm I don't really wanna miss work. I do have sick days but still.

 

 


What time do you have to go in?

 



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hrslvr_paints wrote:

 

LionQueen wrote:

Both poems are interesting paints. The confusion is that you mix modern day terms with archaic language and it break the flow and feel of the poetry. My suggestion is to choose either the archaic or modern, but don't mix the two.



In which version?

 


In both. I've noticed it in your poetry in general. When I first read your stuff, it confused me and I couldn't figure out why. Now I reaalize it's because it jumps in and out of for a lack of a better description " time periods. "

 



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LionQueen wrote:

 

KateisLost wrote:

worry.gifi really hope you get feeling better soon Lion! aww.gif


Thanks. I'm about to go to bed. I just have been hesitant because I wanted to settle in my mind what I was doing tomorrow.hmm I don't really wanna miss work. I do have sick days but still.

 

 


What time do you have to go in?

 

 


For 9am. And I don't know that I'm going to get a doctors appt. that quickly.

 



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I went to bed at 8pm last night feeling kinf of tired and slept till noon today. I had the sore throat when I woke up. IT's worse now and I have that feverish/achy kind of feeling.


Uh-oh! Are you going to the doctor tomorrow?

 

 


I was going to try and get an appt for Thursday since I'm not due for work until 2pm. I work 9-4:30 tomorrow.

 



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hi all!!!!smile

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LionQueen wrote:

 

Island_Reigns wrote:

 

LionQueen wrote:

 

KateisLost wrote:

worry.gifi really hope you get feeling better soon Lion! aww.gif


Thanks. I'm about to go to bed. I just have been hesitant because I wanted to settle in my mind what I was doing tomorrow.hmm I don't really wanna miss work. I do have sick days but still.

 

 


What time do you have to go in?

 

 


For 9am. And I don't know that I'm going to get a doctors appt. that quickly.

 

 


hmm Do you have Urgent Care there?

Do your employers encourage people to stay home from work when sick?

 



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lockesladyness wrote:

hi all!!!!smile


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i think i am gonna go read my book and then go to bed

goodnight everyone! heart.gif sweet dreams

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I don't know any employers who encourage employees to stay home when sick. hmm  As for urgent care, not really. I'd have to fork out 100 bucks. I'd rather go to a family practice. But the thing is, if I go in for 9am, then I won't be able to make an appt for tomorrow if one is available. So, I dunno.

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i think i am gonna go read my book and then go to bed

goodnight everyone! heart.gif sweet dreams


Night Kate.

 



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i think i am gonna go read my book and then go to bed

goodnight everyone! heart.gif sweet dreams


Ok, goodnight! heart.gif

 



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i think i am gonna go read my book and then go to bed

goodnight everyone! heart.gif sweet dreams


nites kate!! enjoy!



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I don't know any employers who encourage employees to stay home when sick. hmm As for urgent care, not really. I'd have to fork out 100 bucks. I'd rather go to a family practice. But the thing is, if I go in for 9am, then I won't be able to make an appt for tomorrow if one is available. So, I dunno.


Oh that's too bad. I've had employers before who would tell us they didn't want us coming in sick because they didn't want everyone else to get sick too. Well, maybe you'll feel better in the morning but it would stink for you to have to work when you feel bad! cry

 



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According to the dictionary, the word "dissembler" is not archaic.

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Since no one seems interested in helping me anymore I'll just delete the poems out of here and go to bed. Good night.

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LionQueen wrote:

I don't know any employers who encourage employees to stay home when sick. hmm As for urgent care, not really. I'd have to fork out 100 bucks. I'd rather go to a family practice. But the thing is, if I go in for 9am, then I won't be able to make an appt for tomorrow if one is available. So, I dunno.


Oh that's too bad. I've had employers before who would tell us they didn't want us coming in sick because they didn't want everyone else to get sick too. Well, maybe you'll feel better in the morning but it would stink for you to have to work when you feel bad! cry

 

 


If I feel this bad still or  worse, I'm not going in. I've got chills and I'm achy.  I put off swallowing as long as I can. 

 



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it is the bewitching hour for me!!! must work in the morning and still find a way in to work!
see you tomorrow~smile

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No car?

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LionQueen wrote:

 

Island_Reigns wrote:

 

LionQueen wrote:

I don't know any employers who encourage employees to stay home when sick. hmm As for urgent care, not really. I'd have to fork out 100 bucks. I'd rather go to a family practice. But the thing is, if I go in for 9am, then I won't be able to make an appt for tomorrow if one is available. So, I dunno.


Oh that's too bad. I've had employers before who would tell us they didn't want us coming in sick because they didn't want everyone else to get sick too. Well, maybe you'll feel better in the morning but it would stink for you to have to work when you feel bad! cry

 

 


If I feel this bad still or worse, I'm not going in. I've got chills and I'm achy. I put off swallowing as long as I can.

 

 


Oh, ok that's good that you won't go in then. smile

 



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I'm about to do the same thing. I'm at 100 now, and I dunno if I;m just imagining it, but there's a tenderness on one side of my neck.

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They're dropping like flies! Goodnight LL and Paints... and I supposed Lion is next.... evileye.gifwink.gif

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LionQueen wrote:

I'm about to do the same thing. I'm at 100 now, and I dunno if I;m just imagining it, but there's a tenderness on one side of my neck.


Take care of yourself and I hope you get a good sleep!

 



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You are correct. I feel druggy and I haven't even taken any drugs

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LionQueen wrote:

I'm about to do the same thing. I'm at 100 now, and I dunno if I;m just imagining it, but there's a tenderness on one side of my neck.


Take care of yourself and I hope you get a good sleep!

 

 


Thanks.

 



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and i just got here....nite everyone thats leaving

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Hi dsg!

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