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LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

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hrslvr_paints · Date: Sep 20, 2006

I made some more changes, just minor vocabulary ones this time, so now it's pretty up-to-date, current. Now I'm really going to bed.

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

I'll re-read it again later.

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

KIL

you are getting into this, and really finding your groove with it. Keep up the great work.

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

snootch2danootch wrote:

KIL you are getting into this, and really finding your groove with it. Keep up the great work.

you are think so? thanks!!!!!! i think that i am going to start on the 5th chapter tomorrow or the next day, depends on how much i am going to be talking about Lost for the next few days

oh and i am going to try my best to make chapter 5 pretty funny

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

KIL.. as was said in the "Waterboy".... YOU CAN DO IT!!!!

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

snootch2danootch wrote:

KIL.. as was said in the "Waterboy".... YOU CAN DO IT!!!!

thanks!!!!

LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

She's getting it going that's for sure:)

Desmond_Pen · Date: Oct 4, 2006

KateisLost wrote:

snootch2danootch wrote:

KIL you are getting into this, and really finding your groove with it. Keep up the great work.

you are think so? thanks!!!!!! i think that i am going to start on the 5th chapter tomorrow or the next day, depends on how much i am going to be talking about Lost for the next few days oh and i am going to try my best to make chapter 5 pretty funny

Loved your story, it's great! I like your characters

hrslvr_paints · Date: Oct 4, 2006

Someday you all will get to see the next chapter of my book, but I'm trying to figure out the whole name situation. I did an internet search of several names and came back with results. Goldwing= a Honda motorcycle, so I definitely don't think I can use that. Redwing and Bluewing came back with results, as did the names of every province and the country that those provinces constitute. So, I'm trying to think of new names, but I haven't even started to think about the location names. Some character names came back with results in a foreign language so I figure I'm safe on those.

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

Desmond_Pen wrote:

KateisLost wrote:

snootch2danootch wrote:

KIL you are getting into this, and really finding your groove with it. Keep up the great work.

you are think so? thanks!!!!!! i think that i am going to start on the 5th chapter tomorrow or the next day, depends on how much i am going to be talking about Lost for the next few days oh and i am going to try my best to make chapter 5 pretty funny

Loved your story, it's great! I like your characters

thank you Des

that means so much to me

hrslvr_paints · Date: Oct 5, 2006

I need a better thesaurus.

lockesladyness · Date: Oct 9, 2006

kl!! your story is coming along nicely!!! where to go from herew, you say??? there are a number of different directions... maybe start with some of the good things your character does during the day and how she may struggle to continue doing this as a vampire.... the struggle between good and evil within one person....

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

lockesladyness wrote:

kl!! your story is coming along nicely!!! where to go from herew, you say??? there are a number of different directions... maybe start with some of the good things your character does during the day and how she may struggle to continue doing this as a vampire.... the struggle between good and evil within one person....

why thank you LL

i might be writing some of chapter 5 tonight if i can get into it!!!

i am going to make this chapter about her and her friend learning what she can now do as a vampire

and what new powers/weeknesses she has

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

KIL.. one thing I think that can be well served in this type of story that you are working on is a small element of surprise.. go ahead and reveal her powers / weaknesses, but maybe keep one of each or something like that in reserve for later (like 10 or more) chapters into it. Then drop them in.... make them a surprise to not only the reader, but they can very much be to the character also. Helps carry the story a bit further, and also keeps the reader wondering if there's going to be another thing they didn't expect coming later on.

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

snootch2danootch wrote:

KIL.. one thing I think that can be well served in this type of story that you are working on is a small element of surprise.. go ahead and reveal her powers / weaknesses, but maybe keep one of each or something like that in reserve for later (like 10 or more) chapters into it. Then drop them in.... make them a surprise to not only the reader, but they can very much be to the character also. Helps carry the story a bit further, and also keeps the reader wondering if there's going to be another thing they didn't expect coming later on.

of course i will not be revealing all of her powers right away

, after all, as time goes on she is going to become a more powerful vampire and be able to do lots more things so there is not way that she will be aware of all her powers in the next chapter

thank you for the advice btw!!!!!!

LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

Ahhhhhhhhh ............... you gave it away!!! One of the unsolved mysteries was is she really a vampire???

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

I was only giving advice...not actually knowing what was up....maybe you gave it awaynow Lion...

BTW...Lion...Great job on the new Chapt. Love the intrigue.

LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

Thanks. No I meant Kil gave it away! LOL!!!

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

LionQueen wrote:

Thanks. No I meant Kil gave it away! LOL!!!

Oh....

LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

HeeHee ...... Oh well, I'm sure she has surprises for us though.

Glad you found the chappy intriguing. I sorta got a little more honed in on the plot as I was writing this one today. I'm starting to get more of an idea of who she is, where she came from.....

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

Just keep up the good work Lion.

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

LionQueen wrote:

Ahhhhhhhhh ............... you gave it away!!! One of the unsolved mysteries was is she really a vampire???

yes she is really a vampire!! but don't worry i am going to have many other mysteries in my story

LionQueen · It Doesn't Matter Who We Were Before ...

Nice

lockesladyness · Date: Oct 10, 2006

you are still doing a great job kl!!!! keep it going!!

KateisLost · Moonlight mod

lockesladyness wrote:

you are still doing a great job kl!!!! keep it going!!

thank you LL

Desmond_Pen · Date: Oct 22, 2006

DREAMER

Very cool Snootch! It's not nice to leave with just one chapter

How long do we have to wait?

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

Desmond_Pen wrote: DREAMER
Very cool Snootch! It's not nice to leave with just one chapter
How long do we have to wait?

Well you've officially made my night Des Thanks.

I should hopefully have the next one up in here before I leave tonight. I have 2 and 3 written, but I need to put them from paper to the CPU, and I'm not the fastest at typing. I also have been using this as edit time while i do the transfer.

Desmond_Pen · Date: Oct 22, 2006

Sir Snootch · "Gamers don't sleep. They just nap between levels."

I'm actually a bit by your reaction.I'm it though.

-- Edited by snootch2danootch at 04:37, 2006-10-22